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Thursday, March 14, 2019

Alone or Not?

Kia ora! This is my free writing I have been doing , it's not done completely but I hope you enjoy. 

It's about this haunted hospital and I not sure how to end it at the moment  .

Please give a comment to help me improve it. 
How do think the ending is going to go and be like?
Whats' your favourite part of the free writing I have been making? 

Please say I can improve the title of it or improve the writings.
 Thanks Enjoy

 
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  1. UnknownMarch 18, 2019 at 12:42 PM

    Kia Ora Grace, It's Ruby here from T1 at Grey Main School.
    I really like how you have added so many detailed words into your writing, I also enjoyed how you had made pictures of the hospital and the door. Next time maybe could you make your story longer and also you could check your sentences to make sure that they make sense.
    Kai Pai
    Ruby

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